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Post by Sean on Jan 24, 2016 13:30:21 GMT -7
Parking Lot Brawl #1
1/24/2016
Attendance: 103
Chance Prophet def. TJ Perkins
Yoshi Hashi & Shinsuke Nakamura def Bo Dallas & David Finley III
Bray Wyatt def. Cody Hall
Roman Reigns def. Jax Dane
Hideo Itami def. Jason Kincaid
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Post by Kevin Elliott on Jan 24, 2016 17:46:38 GMT -7
The show was quite disappointing to be honest. Trust me, I am one for short results, but I still need some context as to why the guys are fighting each other. Or, if it is just a random bout, is there anything that happens afterwards? Are there challenges issued, etc.? Right now, there is nothing that makes me want to read the next show, which is disappointing considering the roster you boast right now.
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Post by Sean on Jan 24, 2016 21:26:05 GMT -7
The show was quite disappointing to be honest. Trust me, I am one for short results, but I still need some context as to why the guys are fighting each other. Or, if it is just a random bout, is there anything that happens afterwards? Are there challenges issued, etc.? Right now, there is nothing that makes me want to read the next show, which is disappointing considering the roster you boast right now. Yeah, sorry, I found out this week that I have chronic kidney disease on top of that I've had a fever over 100 for days and keep having to go to the hospital for hydration. Been popping on here and imagining my shows and that has kept me going but the time snuck up on me and I did not want to lose my roster because I hadn't done enough shows. Moral of the story is my next will be better. |
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Post by jp1985 on Jan 24, 2016 23:30:17 GMT -7
First off, sorry to hear that. Sounds like a really rough situation. Hopefully things get better. It can be hard to understand because if it's me going through that, writing fantasy wrestling or making sure I keep a roster are the absolute last things on my mind, but if it's therapeutic for you, good that the option is here.
As for the show, yeah. I'm pretty much with Kevin on this 100%. I wouldn't have said anything as it initially felt like it's not even worth the time to reply to this effort as the feedback ends up longer than the show itself, but since you took the time to address why it came out this way, that's at least something that can be built upon for your next show in a time crunch to improve it without much effort. It wouldn't take much to just add a time and finishes to the matches and it literally improves them 100% over what's presented here. It's minor and might seem irrelevant, but it dresses up the show and makes the read a little more substantial, without adding any more time than it would have taken to write that reply above. Little things go a long way and while it only adds maybe 10 seconds to the time it takes to read the show, if that, it just gives a lot more context and visualization for the reader.
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Post by Joe on Jan 25, 2016 10:33:09 GMT -7
While I am sorry to hear about your diagnosis and hope for a speedy recovery for you, I feel like the post you made explaining why you couldn't write took more writing and time than your actual show. I'm glad it seems that you are addressing this, though, and look forward to the next effort, as your roster is shaping up to be excellent and I know what you are capable of.
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Post by Sean on Jan 25, 2016 11:32:52 GMT -7
Thanks guys, sorry I put out such a lackluster effort.
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Post by Kevin Elliott on Jan 25, 2016 18:32:55 GMT -7
No worries Sean, your health is the most important thing. This is just fantasy wrestling, don't forget that  Hope you are feeling better and I can't wait to see how your product evolves. |
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Hope you are feeling better and I can't wait to see how your product evolves.